Sunday, February 6, 2011

Going' Old School this Six Sentence Sunday

Yup, the title says it all. This tidbit is from Sorcerer's Carnival, published as one of the contributed stories in the Bloody Carnival Anthology published by Pill Hill Press September 2010. Okay, here it goes...
"Barabin heard the chitter of shadows. Unable to control himself, he looked into the vanity mirror. Behind his reflection they stood. Staring with empty eyes and pained faces. All of them. How they fit, he didn’t know."

Bloody Carnival Anthology: Sorcerer's Carnival

Sorcerer Barabin, trapped for centuries, is working to gain the power to free himself from his dimensional prison...and he's only got two more souls to go. A fun evening at the carnival turns dark and dangerous for Lilia and James when they find out they're Barabin's final selections.



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Posted by Unknown at 5:30 AM
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33 comments:

  1. Sandra SookooFebruary 6, 2011 at 6:29 AM

    Really nice six! Loved the first line and the title!

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  2. Ann MayburnFebruary 6, 2011 at 6:51 AM

    Ohhh that is really freakin spooky! Wonderful!

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  3. Sarah GrimmFebruary 6, 2011 at 7:21 AM

    Wonderful six! Sounds like a great story.

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  4. Claire RobynsFebruary 6, 2011 at 7:32 AM

    chitter of shadows... love, love that, sets the entire scene for the mirror horror that follows

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  5. Chrystalla ThomaFebruary 6, 2011 at 7:53 AM

    Great six!! Sounds like a fascinating story! :-)

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  6. Lisa FoxFebruary 6, 2011 at 8:38 AM

    Oooo, mirrors totally freak me out! I love it!

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  7. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 8:51 AM

    Thank you! I'm glad you all liked this. Barabin is still the favorite antagonist I've written.

    ...oh, and mirrors freak me out too, Lisa.

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  8. L. A. GreenFebruary 6, 2011 at 9:53 AM

    Ewwww. Dark, spooky and fascinating imagery.

    "chitter"

    Loved how you used that to give the shadows more sensory dimension than just being seen with the eyes.

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  9. Edie RamerFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Ooo, that excerpt gave me chills! Nice six!

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  10. ArleneFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:33 AM

    Chilling. Some awesome word choices here. You had me at line one with chitter of shadows. love your writing style.

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:40 AM

    Very nice. He caught my sympathy, but now I don't know if he's good or bad! Very well done.

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  12. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:55 AM

    Thanks! I'm glad you like the sentence. Word choice is such a fickle thing. So relieved it worked for you all.

    LOL Diane. Oh, he's bad...very bad, but from the tainting and lust of power that grows into an uncontrollable insanity.

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  13. Taryn KincaidFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:00 AM

    Eerie. Great foreboding. This sounds like it was a good one!

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  14. Marsha A. MooreFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:33 AM

    Magical and chilly...definitely want to read more. Will check out the anthology.

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  15. TrishFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:34 AM

    ooooo, now those are some creepy sixes. Love the chitter of shadows.

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  16. D. F. KriegerFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:42 AM

    Very, very creepy. Wow!

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  17. Ciara GoldFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:46 AM

    Wow, now those are hook sentences to be sure. How fun.

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  18. Marsha A. MooreFebruary 6, 2011 at 11:53 AM

    Couldn't resist...bought an ebook copy. Will be eager to read!

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  19. Jayel KayeFebruary 6, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    love the creepiness. NIce six. pulled me in to want more.

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  20. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 12:31 PM

    THank you! And thnkas Marsha for getting the anthology. There are some great authors in there with awesome, creepy stories.

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  21. Alanna CocaFebruary 6, 2011 at 1:18 PM

    Very spooky. Nice six.

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  22. Emma PetersenFebruary 6, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Awesome! Loved your 6!

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  23. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 1:43 PM

    Thank you Alanna and Emma!

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  24. LizFebruary 6, 2011 at 3:09 PM

    yikes! that's more than spooky...chilled my heart

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  25. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 4:54 PM

    Very creepy. Really nice use of the mirror.

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  26. UnknownFebruary 6, 2011 at 8:00 PM

    Thank you Liz and Eleri! Mucho appreciated!

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  27. Joleene NaylorFebruary 6, 2011 at 8:37 PM

    oh! a chilling six! I love it!

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  28. Pip GreenFebruary 6, 2011 at 10:04 PM

    Ooo, scary!

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  29. Vanessa BargerFebruary 7, 2011 at 5:27 AM

    Love the way you describe them - and the last sentence. It says alot about his character. Great post!

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  30. CasiFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:54 AM

    Ok, that just sounds creepy. Scary carnival stories... yes very creepy.

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  31. Hailey EdwardsFebruary 7, 2011 at 9:57 AM

    Very nice, an interesting excerpt.

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  32. UnknownFebruary 7, 2011 at 10:57 AM

    Thank you so much! I'm glad to creep you all out. (Haha...Only an author or actor could say that...and maybe a serial killer or such!)

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  33. D CarneyFebruary 7, 2011 at 6:38 PM

    Wow. Creepy in six. Nice job!

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