Sunday, February 6, 2011

Going' Old School this Six Sentence Sunday

Yup, the title says it all. This tidbit is from Sorcerer's Carnival, published as one of the contributed stories in the Bloody Carnival Anthology published by Pill Hill Press September 2010. Okay, here it goes...
"Barabin heard the chitter of shadows. Unable to control himself, he looked into the vanity mirror. Behind his reflection they stood. Staring with empty eyes and pained faces. All of them. How they fit, he didn’t know."

Bloody Carnival Anthology: Sorcerer's Carnival

Sorcerer Barabin, trapped for centuries, is working to gain the power to free himself from his dimensional prison...and he's only got two more souls to go. A fun evening at the carnival turns dark and dangerous for Lilia and James when they find out they're Barabin's final selections.



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33 comments:

  1. Really nice six! Loved the first line and the title!

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  2. Ohhh that is really freakin spooky! Wonderful!

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  3. Wonderful six! Sounds like a great story.

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  4. chitter of shadows... love, love that, sets the entire scene for the mirror horror that follows

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  5. Great six!! Sounds like a fascinating story! :-)

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  6. Oooo, mirrors totally freak me out! I love it!

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  7. Thank you! I'm glad you all liked this. Barabin is still the favorite antagonist I've written.

    ...oh, and mirrors freak me out too, Lisa.

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  8. Ewwww. Dark, spooky and fascinating imagery.

    "chitter"

    Loved how you used that to give the shadows more sensory dimension than just being seen with the eyes.

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  9. Ooo, that excerpt gave me chills! Nice six!

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  10. Chilling. Some awesome word choices here. You had me at line one with chitter of shadows. love your writing style.

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  11. Very nice. He caught my sympathy, but now I don't know if he's good or bad! Very well done.

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  12. Thanks! I'm glad you like the sentence. Word choice is such a fickle thing. So relieved it worked for you all.

    LOL Diane. Oh, he's bad...very bad, but from the tainting and lust of power that grows into an uncontrollable insanity.

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  13. Eerie. Great foreboding. This sounds like it was a good one!

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  14. Magical and chilly...definitely want to read more. Will check out the anthology.

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  15. ooooo, now those are some creepy sixes. Love the chitter of shadows.

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  16. Wow, now those are hook sentences to be sure. How fun.

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  17. Couldn't resist...bought an ebook copy. Will be eager to read!

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  18. love the creepiness. NIce six. pulled me in to want more.

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  19. THank you! And thnkas Marsha for getting the anthology. There are some great authors in there with awesome, creepy stories.

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  20. yikes! that's more than spooky...chilled my heart

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  21. Very creepy. Really nice use of the mirror.

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  22. Thank you Liz and Eleri! Mucho appreciated!

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  23. Love the way you describe them - and the last sentence. It says alot about his character. Great post!

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  24. Ok, that just sounds creepy. Scary carnival stories... yes very creepy.

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  25. Thank you so much! I'm glad to creep you all out. (Haha...Only an author or actor could say that...and maybe a serial killer or such!)

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